Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
Shop deviantART for the
holidays and save BIG!
Click here! :holly:
[x]

deviantART

 


Every morning he wakes up, takes a shower, brushes his teeth, and does whatever else.  Every morning he counts all the money he spent since the week started and makes sure it matches what’s left in his billfold.  He has nearly two million dollars saved away in the bank, and his car reflects that wealth.  Every morning, he goes into the kitchen to fix himself breakfast, and every morning, he reads a very important little magnet on the refrigerator.  He holds its message close:  “A man is not measured by his wealth.”
     He pours some cereal and drowns it in milk.  “A man is not measured by his wealth,” he says.  He eats and looks out at ten acres of tree-covered property.  “A man is not measured by his wealth,” he repeats to himself.  He goes to work and makes even more money to hide away in his fancy Swiss bank account, but all he says about this money is, “A man is not measured by his wealth.”
     That afternoon, he received a horrible message.  A fortune cookie said, “You will lose your wealth.”
     He buys up stocks and bonds.  He invests in gold.  He spreads his money across fifty banks all over the world.  All the while he says, “A man is not measure by his wealth.”  A month passes; then two.  He has forgotten about that pathetic little magnet.  He worries more about losing a lifetime of penny pinching.  One day, he remembers, and he looks at the fridge, but a little magnet is missing.
     “A man is not measured by his wealth,” was the message it bore.
     He stood and stared for seconds that seemed to draw on like hours.  Then, he laughs and eats breakfast… again.
©2006-2009 *dragon-architect
:icondragon-architect:

Author's Comments

This has GOT to be the SHORTEST short story I have ever written since I seriously got back into writing. :nod: This story was inspired when I was reading about the infamous paradox of the self-fulfilling prophecy. This in turn made me think of fortunes and their excellent use of double entendre (pronounced DUH-bull on-TON). It's a French literary term that means "double intentions." Shakespeare and a plethora of the best poets and especially prophecy-ers such as Nostradamus used this technique in which a simple statement can be interpreted an equal number of ways to the number of ppl that read it based soley off the wording and not the context in which it was written.

Anyways, this is a short, li'l ironic piece that I wrote in just a few minutes during my first class of the day on Friday. When my mom read it, she loved it and the said that it was in the same literary style as O. Henry. Now, this caught me waaaay of guard because the only O. Henry story I have ever read was "The Son of Red Chief." When I told my band director about it, he guessed O. Henry right at the exact same moment I was getting ready to tell him what my mom said about it. :o

I don't want constructive criticism pointing out syntactical and tense errors. After rereading it a million times and editing just a few parts, it's finished. All tense shifts and comma/punctuation placements are intentional and critical for the story's essence to really sink in. If you want, you can provide a technical analysis, but please nothing about any grammar errors. I am truly amazed at what I churned out in just thirty minutes, and I wanna keep it that way. :D

I will be making an audio recording of myself reading the story. If you want a copy of the audio file (please keep in mind that this is still MY story, so no plagiarism), just e-mail me and you'll go on my list. First come, first serve. ;) The audio file will be in .wav format because that is the audio file format that my mp3 player uses to make voice recordings.

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconscorpiowaterangel:
Good story! :D

--
'Everything is us, and we are everything, but what good is this, is everything is nothing?'
:iconpanamatt:
Irony. This is some of the best writing of yours I have read.

--
Ohh it's not your fault. It's not your mother's fault. Now...you pay attention to old Rooter. It is nobody's fault. The Great Circle of Life has begun. But you see, not all of us arrive together at the end.
:icondragon-architect:
situational/dramatic irony more or less, but this is mostly the "self fulfilling prophecy." ;)

It's one of those random busts of inspiration.
:iconpanamatt:
It is extremely well written to convey the message. You subtlely wrote in his thrifty habits in the beginning of the story without making it seem like he was overly frugal. "A Man is not Measured by His Wealth", but yet he practices wealth saving habits; he has everything he could ever want. Still, the reader sympathizes with the man and believes that he believes that "A Man is not Measured by His Wealth". It isn't until the fortune message that this facade crumbles and the self fulfilling prophecy takes over. At the end of the story he is subserviant to his wealth and to the monotony of everyday life, which is also something that you hint at. Absolutely brilliant.

Bursts of inspiration are the best. The stories of mine that I like the most are the ones written in moments of inspiration, so I know how that works.

--
Ohh it's not your fault. It's not your mother's fault. Now...you pay attention to old Rooter. It is nobody's fault. The Great Circle of Life has begun. But you see, not all of us arrive together at the end.
:icondragon-architect:
:o Whoa. That's . . . pretty much the effect I was going for. :worship: I wish I could analyze something as well as you can.
:iconpanamatt:
I guess it takes a little bit of practice in both writing and reading other's work. In my writing, I like subtlety because it lets the reader do some thinking while he/she reads. I also like stories that...well...deal with a subject that is inspired or original, or presents a realistic scenario; I don't know how to explain that. :P I guess I should say that stories that are uninspired, unoriginal, or unrealistic don't really impress me.

So anyway, I have my standards as a result of my writing. I also think a little about how the syntax reads. I hate to use this word, but does it "flow"? Does one sentence confuse the reader, causing him to reread it several times, or does it automatically lead to the next. Then there are typos of course.

I should say that probably one of the most important things involved in analysis is the author's goal. What was he trying to get across, and did he accomplish that?

I'm finding it hard to qualify the way I analyze stuff; I guess you just have to form your own standards and do it yourself. Or you could just read the story and spout whatever you noticed while reading it, since that's one of the key things to begin with. :lol:

--
Ohh it's not your fault. It's not your mother's fault. Now...you pay attention to old Rooter. It is nobody's fault. The Great Circle of Life has begun. But you see, not all of us arrive together at the end.

Details

November 12, 2006
2.0 KB

Statistics

7
1 [who?]
106 (0 today)
2 (0 today)

Share

Link
Thumb

Site Map